tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9089616.post4753879873069757682..comments2023-12-30T18:56:13.073-05:00Comments on Land Mammal: Draft dodgingAnne Haineshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17038705452206752521noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9089616.post-47380505225991145342010-01-13T22:59:56.987-05:002010-01-13T22:59:56.987-05:00Some of the first stanza, from "I try to stee...Some of the first stanza, from "I try to steer..." to "wrong year," seems to me to wander a little, feels less grounded than the rest of the poem.<br /><br />I recall you commented here in the blog once (and I'm sure I'm recalling this imperfectly) that you tend to write in stanzas at least initially, because you find it helps in writing the early drafts. Something to that effect.<br /><br />I found as I read the poem/draft that I found it read better, I could feel the music and movement of it better, if I put different line breaks and stanza breaks in it (at least in my own mind), not the regulated four-line stanzas all the way through.Lyle Daggetthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10731915540520704368noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9089616.post-1366835073543366852010-01-13T17:58:34.256-05:002010-01-13T17:58:34.256-05:00this poem is really neat. sorry, for weak adjectiv...this poem is really neat. sorry, for weak adjectives on my part! not only does it work as a poem but it really speaks to me as someone who also feels like i haven't drafted anything in a while. it is saying - muse stop misdirecting me!Jessie Cartyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13181286764480973423noreply@blogger.com