ain't no sin to be glad you're alive
So much I like here, especially "Years we wander through like stanzas or the lines on a stranger’s palm." Glad I caught this before it disapparated!
My favorite?:You want to latch on and not move forward.I've felt like that. Excellent draft. Is this one for the music ms?
i love the format of the long lines for this one :)
Good first draft. I see lots of places I would tighten up, but you've got some great imagery here.
Thanks, all! Leslie - nope, I'm pretty sure this isn't for the music ms. - I think it's for (gulp) whatever comes after it.
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