Sunday, August 02, 2009

Sunday draft

Jumping on while I have connectivity for a minute. This is a drafty draft from earlier this afternoon -- it will go "poof" in a day or so.



Anonymous said...

So much I like here, especially "Years we wander through like stanzas or the lines on a stranger’s palm." Glad I caught this before it disapparated!

Leslie said...

My favorite?:

You want to latch on and not move forward.

I've felt like that. Excellent draft. Is this one for the music ms?

Jessie Carty said...

i love the format of the long lines for this one :)

Collin Kelley said...

Good first draft. I see lots of places I would tighten up, but you've got some great imagery here.

Anne said...

Thanks, all! Leslie - nope, I'm pretty sure this isn't for the music ms. - I think it's for (gulp) whatever comes after it.